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Post by exa on Feb 13, 2015 19:51:12 GMT -4
GENERAL
•NAME Exa
•NICKNAME Wild, Sky, 'Xa.
•AGE 2 years
•GENDER feamle
•RANK DESIRED alpha
•SPECIES Timber wolf
•COAT COLOR light brown, cream light fawn, coffe.
•EYE COLOR icy blue, grey-blue.
•HEIGHT 28 inches
•WEIGHT 30 pounds
•BUILD lean
•MARKINGS darker shaded line down forehead
•SCARS scar across left ear
•OTHER longer, silky fur
BACKGROUND •PERSONALITY Proud, adventurous, tries to enjoy life, free spirit.
•FAMILY alive somewhere (unknown)
•HISTORY Exa's history is unknown by most wolves. She only knows it. Exa was born on a late summer's afternoon. She was the second pup born out of three. Her father was unknown (she knows but she tries to forget him). Exa quickly became a popular wolf in her pack. A grizzly bear got in a fight with her and scratched her ear. Her crush saved her before the creature would kill her. Exa decided to explore the world and stumbled on this forest. She joined the pack and is learning their ways.
•STRENGTHS her free spirit, her will, she never gives up.
•WEAKNESSES her father, seeing a loved one die.
•LIKES hunting, herself, fighting, freedom.
•DISLIKES her father.
•HABITS often doesn't think about what she says and could easily hurt feeling
ABOUT YOU •SPONSOR how you found us Top50WolfRPG
•AVERAGE ATTENDANCE at least an hour a day
•PASSWORD
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Post by Echo on Feb 13, 2015 20:47:21 GMT -4
Hey, awesome! Hope you like it here once you've been accepted!
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Post by Whisper on Feb 14, 2015 15:43:20 GMT -4
Okay, sorry if this seems a little harsh:
No you may not have alpha rank that title goes to the creator of the site (Kipxin) but once Kole moves up to alpha male then beta female rank will be available (these ranks must be earned and are usually not given to new members). 30 pounds is very unrealistic especially for a two foot four inch wolf. To put it into perspective larger wolves like timber wolves and large dogs are weighing in at around 100 pounds. Even a red wolf that is a slight wolf and thin is around 70 pounds. Probably the lightest being the ethiopan wolves and the arabian wolves and I would say they have to be around 50 You can start out joined to the pack, and that's fine. Just know that you will have to provide a little explanation of that. I don't have a problem with your history, but your personality is a little sketchy. I think that I understand you are trying to be brief and that's great. Sometimes a character's essence can be brought down into those terms; who they are on the core. But we are trying to get a larger scope. I'm not asking for an essay, but it would be nice to know a little bit more. If habits and things like strengths and weaknesses are hard for you then that's fine. I would however like to see a physical weakness, and more dislikes and likes. While your wolf could just simply be an exuberant optimist I find it very hard to believe that she dislikes nothing except her father who is not very well explained. Please also realize that your wolf has just recently turned sexually mature (2 years) that's a little young, but it is allowed here. I would just like to make you aware of that.
Other than that I really like your bio. I feel like there are some spots that I personally would change but then it wouldn't be your character! Anyway since I think there is more than a little room for improvement on this then I think you should tell me when you have redone it (Post here) and then I'll look it over. If you want help then I'm always available and I hope to see you in the rp! Also you can look at the accepted bios if you want a model.
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Post by exa on Feb 14, 2015 16:42:08 GMT -4
Thought it was the wished rank of the wolf
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Post by Whisper on Feb 14, 2015 17:25:30 GMT -4
I'm sorry; I believe I phrased that incorrectly.
You may wish any rank you want, but what you will receive may be different. You can want to have alpha rank and you may take that up with Kipxin, but that rank is not available. So could you please choose another rank? If that sounds hypocritical then I'm sorry.
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Post by exa on Feb 16, 2015 18:54:17 GMT -4
Would lead guardian or hunter do?
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Post by Whisper on Feb 17, 2015 0:50:00 GMT -4
Primary and Secondary ranks have to be earned. If you want to start out hunter or guardian and then work your way up by gaining respect among other members then that's something you will have to take up yourself. I looked it up and your size is proportional to your weight, so I'm sorry about that. Please forgive me on my lack of knowledge.
for this reason you are accepted into the rp for now, but please choose a tertiary rank and add physical weaknesses. Post when you have done this and I will review your bio. If you have not fixed it in some time then you will not be allowed to rp until you do.
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